Prometheia

[matsunosuperfan]

Thanks for the feedback. This was already trouble to write, not sure how to rework either.

I think a good move here would be to make a concerted effort to get off the triggering subject; instead of summarizing, use the inherited characters/scene to make your own magic. You're doing a little of that already but every time a gesture starts to cook, we come back to the foundational narrative. What if we just... didn't come back?