love, tolerance, and harm

[JohnS]

Hi Shady,

I'm too newby to offer much useful critique, but I need to try.

The "solid outside" and "hard-boiled egg" analogies seem important to the sense of the poem and could be stronger. You could try carapice and clam shell or oyster or turtle shell.

In the end I have no idea what the poem means but it seems to me to have potential worth pursuing.

Thanks for letting me use your poem for critique practice. Write on!