06-02-2010, 10:37 AM
what a bugger.
i can't see a thing i'd change.
maybe i found the last line a little overly dramatic but in truth i think thats just me and not the words.
i get the feeling
of
"The best laid schemes o' mice an' men / Gang aft agley." ;
an excerpt from a poem by Burns called, To a Mouse.
and when they do we're amazed we (go dark) at the surprising fact they have. (gone awry, )
no big words, nothing exciting in a line by line way but as a whole it think its suprerb.
at last....cap C in choking if you want to follow a consistent format.
i can believe that,s it
thanks for a great read ds
i can't see a thing i'd change.
maybe i found the last line a little overly dramatic but in truth i think thats just me and not the words.
i get the feeling
of
"The best laid schemes o' mice an' men / Gang aft agley." ;
an excerpt from a poem by Burns called, To a Mouse.
and when they do we're amazed we (go dark) at the surprising fact they have. (gone awry, )
no big words, nothing exciting in a line by line way but as a whole it think its suprerb.
at last....cap C in choking if you want to follow a consistent format.
i can believe that,s it
thanks for a great read ds