The Blank Verse Challenge (Practice IP with me)
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(01-19-2026, 08:25 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote:  So Nana's started talking bout the bible,
She doesn't like the violence and the wars
The battles and the smites in early books 
It's almost like what's on the news today
No, Nana says that God has chosen her,
And she's immortal, and an astral child,
And sasquatch lives in texas. She believes
that every YouTube video is for her.
At what point do we need to intervene?
Is wanting to improve the earth, a danger?
Just let her know we're listening, and we care.
And she'll stay home fulfilling her divine 
Mission
Hi, I've been enjoying coming back to this multiple times, I love the story, what goes on in her mind and the compassionate ending.

I'm not qualified to accurately evaluate the IP but a few notes:

There were a few "ands" I was forced to stress, in L2 and 3 they're close together and weakened the read for me, as did the lines that ended with an unstressed syllable.
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RE: The Blank Verse Challenge (Practice IP with me) - by wasellajam - 01-21-2026, 06:13 AM



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