The Blank Verse Challenge (Practice IP with me)

[dukealien]

Luck and Totality

Perhaps it’s lucky your new SUV
was totaled so soon after it arrived
in your garage.  A leaping winter buck
it struck rose up and bounded on his way;
the car was not so fortunate, but you
did not lose face to air-bag’s triggered punch.
Could be electric running was to blame:
in hybrid silence impact stunned all three.
You gave that car a name, a christening
of sorts but hadn’t had the time to form
that deep affection long-owned autos gain–
so best forgotten as its parts pass through
used markets, saving others from its fate.

Hi! I enjoyed this, the story, word choice and regular meter. The only faint hiccup I had was L12 as. I can say it stressed though it wouldn’t normally be but it’s probably one of those loopholes that’s totally acceptable, I’m no expert

As you mentioned before, after I write it, I hear it that way... hard to predict what a reader will hear.

On the earlier "enTIRE" vs "ENtire" issue, I think it may really be dialect:  when I try to say enTIRE it develops a midwestern phantom "y:"  en-TI-yur.  Which I avoid because it's low-class, or just unpleasant.  Professor Higgins would be scandalized, musically... the Americans haven't spoken it for years!