The Blank Verse Challenge (Practice IP with me)
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(01-11-2026, 06:20 AM)wasellajam Wrote:  
(01-11-2026, 06:04 AM)dukealien Wrote:  Woke up Tomorrow (blank verse)


I woke up yesterday still half-asleep,
believing it the morn of Saturday.
Then, as I started to unbed myself,
recalled last evening’s piquant chili supper
which, being Mexican, hotly pursued
its revolution in my burning guts.
O, what a thing, this nearly having lost
an entire Friday, even one without
a single thing to do except digest.
Fun poem, great title. Only place I tripped was
an enTIRE FRIday
Surprised!  I thought I'd have to defend "hotly" or perhaps "digest" (verb di-GEST, noun DI-gest though the verb is not properly intransitive).  To me, it's EN-tire - trying now, I can't think of a spot where I'd say (or read) en-TIRE.  Dialect?  EN-tire does sound a little carny - "And now the Human Wildfire will consume an EN-tire foot-long hotdog WITH-out taking a breath!"

On yours, I'd substitute a colon for the semicolon and semicolon for the comma... otherwise immaculate.
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RE: The Blank Verse Challenge (Practice IP with me) - by dukealien - 01-11-2026, 10:07 AM



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