I Am In/Stead

[Deor Ana Log]

I don't get the point of forward slashes in a poem. If you want the line to be, well, the next line, then just write it out as the next line.
The whole piece comes off as gimmicky and there is no payoff in the text of the poem itself to the reader, for all the hard work of reading what's been written.

"Soiling my soul masquerading as a
garden wreath I worry, when I wake I won’t wait with “me” Wailing simulating silent tears
soaking sealocked tree Glamorizing growth sprouting out of single/seed I am little/lovely
labor grasping life-sized lead Stating syllables nulling sentence’s I conceive, ruby,
amber, seaweed invisible out/"

Is just gibberish, sorry to say.

Here is the poem in the original format for easier reading; the reason I changed it was due to someone elses recommendation. Also it is not gibberish, it is poetry that can be interpreted in many different ways. Whether you agree with the quality or not, lets both agree on that.
                                                                                  
                                                                                 I am lastly lucid and dread being/led

Pondering “who am I when I’m dead/asleep?”

I savor seabound, silent rooster’s screech

Follow family found during delayed dreams

Fighting to fade into flickers of melodic memory

I am the art, act, ache wanting to/lead

Pretending my becoming/forgotten self lies below floating sea

I perceive before and after slipping by/past imaginary

Soiling my soul masquerading as a garden wreath

I worry, when I wake I won’t wait with “me”

Wailing simulating silent tears soaking sealocked tree

Glamorizing growth sprouting out of single/seed

I am little/lovely labor grasping life-sized lead

Stating syllables nulling sentence’s scream

I conceive, ruby, amber, seaweed invisible out/bleed

I try, I try, I try to echo more than keep/dream

Dreaming, “when did life start to need”?

I hope/I survive in this forever fake/fantasy

Weaving/I am who I am instead of me

I chant before/lament and after/lament,

 “Who am I to lead/me?”

I/can’t