09-26-2025, 03:44 AM
I don't get the point of forward slashes in a poem. If you want the line to be, well, the next line, then just write it out as the next line.
The whole piece comes off as gimmicky and there is no payoff in the text of the poem itself to the reader, for all the hard work of reading what's been written.
"Soiling my soul masquerading as a
garden wreath I worry, when I wake I won’t wait with “me” Wailing simulating silent tears
soaking sealocked tree Glamorizing growth sprouting out of single/seed I am little/lovely
labor grasping life-sized lead Stating syllables nulling sentence’s I conceive, ruby,
amber, seaweed invisible out/"
Is just gibberish, sorry to say.
The whole piece comes off as gimmicky and there is no payoff in the text of the poem itself to the reader, for all the hard work of reading what's been written.
"Soiling my soul masquerading as a
garden wreath I worry, when I wake I won’t wait with “me” Wailing simulating silent tears
soaking sealocked tree Glamorizing growth sprouting out of single/seed I am little/lovely
labor grasping life-sized lead Stating syllables nulling sentence’s I conceive, ruby,
amber, seaweed invisible out/"
Is just gibberish, sorry to say.