Avo

[Semele]

You lie in a bed that nearly swallows you
Body shriveled like a salted fish
Tongue lolling
Dreaming of abstracts
The rattle in your breath
Knocks every thought out of my head

Feel no shame 
Because no one’s laughing
I only remember a hundred years ago
When you peeled me oranges

I really enjoy the imagery here, it really paints a picture, but the lines after these become somewhat disconnected, at least for my perception. If I try hard to find meaning, it seems to be referring maybe to a parental figure, someone who has aged (rattle) and the act of peeling oranges long ago seem to be connected to past nourishment. But it feels like it needs a just a little bit more. Another thing, and this could be just me, is that I think "Knocks every thought out of my head" doesn't flow as smoothly as everything else, maybe change "knocks" for "knocking" and adapt the rest of the phrase? Maybe "Knocking thoughts out of my head". Just food for thought, I'm new to this too