Friends
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(03-17-2025, 02:19 AM)CRNDLSM Wrote:  Clock in Clock out
Zone in Zone out

New tables, <--  Here same worries
Same tables,  and here new stories
Each day begins
Clock in again
New friends same places
Same names new faces
No one sees sun
Clock out days done
Same ways new worries 
New ways same stories

Zone in zone out
Clock in Clock out
I think if you use commas in those instances, then you need them after 'friends', 'names', 'out,' etc. Either no commas or a whole bunch. Choose one. Other than that, I love it. Everymanish.
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Messages In This Thread
Friends - by CRNDLSM - 03-17-2025, 02:19 AM
RE: Friends - by Tiger the Lion - 03-17-2025, 03:00 AM
RE: Friends - by carahmellow - 03-17-2025, 03:38 AM
RE: Friends - by busker - 03-17-2025, 05:16 AM
RE: Friends - by brynmawr1 - 03-17-2025, 07:33 AM
RE: Friends - by CRNDLSM - 03-17-2025, 08:26 PM
RE: Friends - by RiverNotch - 03-17-2025, 08:58 PM



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