02-28-2025, 02:33 AM
I'm a bit new to critique-ing, so this is my first critique.
This poem does an amazing job in exploring the idea of working for the carrot while emphasizing the worthlessness of the carrot when it comes easily.
One thing that I thought of to explain your message in the poem could be some imagery of an adventurer or superhero in a movie has no conflict, the fact that they find the treasure in the jungle or defeat the big bad brings about discontentment rather than happiness.
One of the best things I've taken to heart in my poem writing journey is the idea that you should "show not tell",, but it's always hard to think of it that way. Just like in the ideas I gave about the adventurer and superhero, the reader may feel a bit discontent if they are simply told what to think rather than shown why they should think that way.
I hope you have an amazing day; I love this poem.
Sincerely,
poet dude I guess
This poem does an amazing job in exploring the idea of working for the carrot while emphasizing the worthlessness of the carrot when it comes easily.
One thing that I thought of to explain your message in the poem could be some imagery of an adventurer or superhero in a movie has no conflict, the fact that they find the treasure in the jungle or defeat the big bad brings about discontentment rather than happiness.
One of the best things I've taken to heart in my poem writing journey is the idea that you should "show not tell",, but it's always hard to think of it that way. Just like in the ideas I gave about the adventurer and superhero, the reader may feel a bit discontent if they are simply told what to think rather than shown why they should think that way.
I hope you have an amazing day; I love this poem.
Sincerely,
poet dude I guess