Lies
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Hey! I'd definitely trim this down to your favorite stanzas and avoid filler words. what I love about your style is it flows like spoken word, honestly in a musical way. Reminded me of mewithoutyou lyrics or touche amore.

As far as written poetry you could use grammar to help the reader follow your flow. Regardless it was an enjoyable read!
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Lies - by depressedmetalhead - 02-14-2025, 03:57 AM
RE: Lies - by carahmellow - 02-14-2025, 07:12 AM
RE: Lies - by busker - 02-14-2025, 01:46 PM
RE: Lies - by Bunx - 02-14-2025, 04:01 PM
RE: Lies - by depressedmetalhead - 02-15-2025, 02:31 AM
RE: Lies - by busker - 02-21-2025, 03:47 AM
RE: Lies - by midnightcowboy - 02-21-2025, 03:10 AM
RE: Lies - by Mark A Becker - 02-21-2025, 07:05 AM



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