Indicative
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(10-21-2024, 12:58 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  The indica hits her different—

it’s indiscriminate
and too often 
takes away
more hope 
than hurt.

She’d hoped to sleep tonight.
Meant to comment on this when I saw it first. I think it could be trimmed like above and it loses nothing. The repetition of 'hope' and 'hoped' was a bit awkward. I like the play on words and the fact it's about weed.

Cheers for the read
feedback award wae aye man ye radgie
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Messages In This Thread
Indicative - by Tiger the Lion - 10-21-2024, 12:58 PM
RE: Indicative - by RiverNotch - 10-21-2024, 09:45 PM
RE: Indicative - by Mark A Becker - 10-23-2024, 07:01 PM
RE: Indicative - by Magpie - 10-26-2024, 06:00 PM
RE: Indicative - by Bunx - 10-27-2024, 01:48 AM



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