The indica hits her different—

it’s indiscriminate
and too often 
takes away
more hope 
than hurt.

She’d hoped to sleep tonight.

i guess this just means it's imperative she use a different a sleeping aid
i mean, maybe she would -- i suppose that's conditional -- were she more...er...subjunctive...

Tiger the Lion Wrote:The indica hits her different—

it’s indiscriminate
and too often 
takes away
more hope 
than hurt.

She’d hoped to sleep tonight.

Hey Paul -
I get it indica/indicative.
I'd like to feel more of a sunny day to moonless night vibe, though: more showing.
...Mark

(10-21-2024, 12:58 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:  The indica hits her different—

it’s indiscriminate
and too often 
takes away
more hope 
than hurt.

She’d hoped to sleep tonight.

Meant to comment on this when I saw it first. I think it could be trimmed like above and it loses nothing. The repetition of 'hope' and 'hoped' was a bit awkward. I like the play on words and the fact it's about weed.

Cheers for the read

As an ex weed dealer my primary customer base was girls wanting to sleep and not have nightmares. Bring sober and having issues with PTSD and nightmares now I miss smoking. I feel like this poem is like admittance of defeat and pain which is not your average weed poem