09-20-2024, 09:28 AM
Hey Val!
Thanks aton for the helpful feedback, been meaning to turn the whole poem in couplets so I took the initiative. The original idea was grouping the ideas into individual stanzas to help the flow of the reader. Though on revision I think it's much better as couplets.
I went ahead and my the first couplet one sentence I think it reads a lot better.
I feel write pretty scattered at time. I like idea of my writing reflecting chaos of theme though it's so often not needed. I'm stoked you liked the poem I can definitely say the same of everything I've read of yours.
Your ideas about the poem are spot on I love that it comes across as that.
Thanks aton for the helpful feedback, been meaning to turn the whole poem in couplets so I took the initiative. The original idea was grouping the ideas into individual stanzas to help the flow of the reader. Though on revision I think it's much better as couplets.
I went ahead and my the first couplet one sentence I think it reads a lot better.
I feel write pretty scattered at time. I like idea of my writing reflecting chaos of theme though it's so often not needed. I'm stoked you liked the poem I can definitely say the same of everything I've read of yours.
Your ideas about the poem are spot on I love that it comes across as that.
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
Bunx
--mark twain
Bunx