Friends and Feelings
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(04-22-2024, 01:40 AM)Bunx Wrote:  FRIENDS

"Do you ever develop feelings 
for your friends?"

My co worker asked casually 
folding up bags of coffee
at a productive pace. ... I like the 'productive pace' 

Being a bi man, it's not
too tough to avoid
binaries within friends.

"Yeah, it's funny you mention. I've 
been feeling a little heart break since
my best friend Sarah

(They heard her name
an immeasurable amount since 
she moved back.)

moved back home
to spend some time traveling."


FEELINGS

It's strange how I wear ...not sure about 'it's strange'
these feelings 

like the handmade beanies
she made me for watching
her cat. ...nice little detail

Folks compliment every hat
she made for me.

"Thanks,
my best friend made it."

Evidence people see things
you could never buy. ... I don't see the paradox here, but it's an ok line

After she left. 
I grew to like the things
she made even more.

When she moved here
she chose an apartment 
close to mine, ...this and the previous strophe are spread over 6 lines....maybe economise? the content is not compelling enough for 6 lines

everyday I can see her old front 
door on my drive to work.

A reminder that
love is not a thing
felt after a kiss,

or under the sheets 
of a room you've 
hardly been in. .....this and the previous strophe sound preachy

Love is something you choose,
a place you want to be. 

Someone that wants you to be there.

When she sees
me crying on her last night
in town,

she won't let me go
without a second long hug.

Leaving me better off 
for being there.
Nice one...maybe a little tightening needed
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Messages In This Thread
Friends and Feelings - by Bunx - 04-22-2024, 01:40 AM
RE: Friends and Feelings - by Wjames - 04-22-2024, 04:07 AM
RE: Friends and Feelings - by Bunx - 04-22-2024, 04:23 AM
RE: Friends and Feelings - by busker - 04-22-2024, 07:16 AM
RE: Friends and Feelings - by Bunx - 04-22-2024, 10:42 AM
RE: Friends and Feelings - by Tiger the Lion - 04-22-2024, 01:37 PM
RE: Friends and Feelings - by Bunx - 04-23-2024, 01:11 AM
RE: Friends and Feelings - by Wjames - 06-01-2024, 03:12 AM
RE: Friends and Feelings - by Bunx - 06-01-2024, 02:29 AM
RE: Friends and Feelings - by Bunx - 06-01-2024, 05:08 AM



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