3-25-24

[Enfant Mardi]

embittered winter
pisses slush on our parade--
such a sore loser

Great imagery. Is *embittered* needed, as the final line is expressing the same thing? I love the middle line-really original. In the name of haiku succinctness and last line punch I might write it thus:


winter
pissing slush on our parade     
  - sore loser