Uncle Kev

[brynmawr1]

Uncle Kev

my first memory;   meh, maybe a little dramatic even if true

his thin white muscular legs,   don't need the comma and I would suggest another than 'running'.  Maybe dribbling or other footballer vernacular
running

a rain-sopped #5 leather football
no one would dare play with today

(I'm concussed just thinking about it)  an important clue, well done

a curled corner
and a diving header
into the summer slop
and into the back of the net   it's already set up, don't take away the ambiguity, unless you change L1 of last stanza to indicate the shot went in but Kev is not well

everyone shouting, "Get in!"  the way written it's already moot, unless they shout something else.
everyone shouting
everyone         the funneling of focus is brilliant, so subtle.

Hey Tiger,
My suggestions/observations above. Hope it helps.
Take care,
bryn