Luna,

[brynmawr1]

Luna,

the self absorption 
was inexcusable 

I lost track
of your waxing 
and waning
till my heart was aimless

look at you
representing the sun
anyway

look at me
embodying guilt

forgetting myself

forgetting you

again

Hi Tiger,
My only suggestion would be to rearrange S3 with a word swap.

look at you
always
representing the sun

seems to have some layers and solve some concerns.
Maybe,
bryn