10-31-2023, 10:27 PM
(10-31-2023, 02:05 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: Luna,Hi Tiger,
the self absorption
was inexcusable
I lost track
of your waxing
and waning
till my heart was aimless very nice opening
look at you
representing the sun I think another word choice here is called for here; "representing" too abstract; "standing in for"? or something unexpected
anyway
look at me
embodying guilt
forgetting myself
forgetting you
again
A good one. A few notes notes above.
TqB