10-16-2023, 01:01 PM
Thank you both, Fearful and Lizzie - I think this one can be improved a lot.
I've made an edit making it more clear, I think, but I do think there can be benefits to having things not be entirely clear.
To me, meaning or lyricism aren't what makes a poem succesful, feeling is - and feeling often isn't clear. Lyricism and meaning can enhance feeling, but to me they are tools towards that end, not the end itself. Of course, these last two sentences are a sorry bit of mumbo jumbo.
I think I might try and add another verse or two to this one if I can.
I've made an edit making it more clear, I think, but I do think there can be benefits to having things not be entirely clear.
To me, meaning or lyricism aren't what makes a poem succesful, feeling is - and feeling often isn't clear. Lyricism and meaning can enhance feeling, but to me they are tools towards that end, not the end itself. Of course, these last two sentences are a sorry bit of mumbo jumbo.
I think I might try and add another verse or two to this one if I can.