The Five O'Clock Sun (revised)
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‘Endure its firmament’ puzzled me, and then I saw Mark’s remark about the heat dome you’ve been having up north of the equator.
You could tighten it up and the rest if you really wanted to, but it’s also okay as the loose draft of a postcard poem.
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RE: The Five O'Clock Sun (revised) - by Knot - 07-29-2023, 09:43 PM
RE: The Five O'Clock Sun (revised) - by busker - 07-30-2023, 11:03 AM
RE: The Five O'Clock Sun (revised) - by rowens - 07-30-2023, 11:11 AM
RE: The Five O'Clock Sun (revised) - by Knot - 07-31-2023, 11:14 PM



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