untitled

[brynmawr1]

His love letter lies
on a park bench words bleeding
with every rain drop

alternative version

His love letter lies
on a park bench words bleeding
more with each rain drop

I like posted version best.  I think the title gives away too much, lessening the impact it could have.

 and I know how you feel about titles.

Maybe that's why haiku don't have titles.  You can always use the untitled label.

Using untitled is a great suggestion.  I had a "Duh!" moment.  Going to use it for all my poems now, maybe.
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Bryn