Beware the Mall

[Mark A Becker]

Seeking a critique. 

Hello Motion-
MISC is usually for comments, so you may want to move this to a critique forum.

You sure do use a lot of words to describe shoplifting/stealing.  I almost always comment that poems should be shortened to highlight a central theme.  Somewhere within your prose is your poem. I'm going to eliminate quite a lot, and leave you with the impressions I got:

Beware the Mall

vendors shout and hawk their wares,
a cacophony of noise. quiet down
and simply take my money.

I feel growing unease,
watching shoppers steal,

what's the point of currency?

Kids shout and laugh outside,
morph others into volcanoes
of anger and frustration.

they steal