05-22-2010, 08:25 AM
yes that's the way to post a new poem Mimi.
i'm glad this is in mild crit
because i can't as such see anything wrong in it.
not sure the last three lines work for me, they feel a little forced.
the picture you paint feels real and rustic.
loved the 1st stanza. it was a good way to lead us into the poem
and the 2nd warmed us up to the rest.
not sure why but i i found these three lines to be the essence of what i think is a great read..
The Cattails greening
has brought you up
from under the bog.
i'm glad this is in mild crit
because i can't as such see anything wrong in it.
not sure the last three lines work for me, they feel a little forced.
the picture you paint feels real and rustic.
loved the 1st stanza. it was a good way to lead us into the poem
and the 2nd warmed us up to the rest.
not sure why but i i found these three lines to be the essence of what i think is a great read..
The Cattails greening
has brought you up
from under the bog.