So I March - edit
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...So I March


I could have been a dancer
or a drummer–
I’ve got rhythm
struggling too weakly
to step out...




Thanks to all critics, especially  @Mark.  It's apparent that's just what the poem needs to clarify what's supposed to be going on.

The Soviets used to say "Quantity has a quality all its own."  Perhaps we can say that in poetry (or just writing?) "Simplicity has a complexity all its own."
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So I March - edit - by dukealien - 12-08-2022, 05:32 AM
RE: So I March - by CRNDLSM - 12-14-2022, 10:04 PM
RE: So I March - by TranquillityBase - 12-14-2022, 10:31 PM
RE: So I March - by Mark A Becker - 12-15-2022, 06:14 AM
RE: So I March - edit - by dukealien - 12-15-2022, 11:15 PM



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