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So I March - edit

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12-15-2022, 06:14 AM

(12-08-2022, 05:32 AM)dukealien Wrote: So I March

I could have been a dancer
or a drummer–
I’ve got rhythm
struggling too weakly
to step out.

Hi duke-
A very simple suggestion to tie the last line back to the title (which I think was your intent).

… so I march
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to step out…

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So I March - edit - by dukealien - 12-08-2022, 05:32 AM

RE: So I March - by CRNDLSM - 12-14-2022, 10:04 PM

RE: So I March - by Mark A Becker - 12-15-2022, 06:14 AM

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