05-26-2022, 01:07 AM
(05-26-2022, 12:45 AM)Semicircle Wrote:
Photos
wrinkled by oil.
Peeled back faces;
distended jaw
fogging them.
Flicking to cinders
one by one.
Silver love
pops in the hearth.
Everything works for me except the jaw....fogging them. Do you mean "smoking them", the object being on a fire in next stanza.
Just a thought. If you feel fogging is the right word, go for it.
TqB