02-28-2022, 01:28 PM
"as Scipio pardoned Gracchus,
as Hitler pardoned Roehm. "
No need of a pardon as Shakespeare said in MSND: "for when the players are all dead, there needs none to be blamed."
I tend to agree, or at least would in terms of critiquing this as purely a poem. In this instance the four lines ending on the penultimate is a concise synopsis of the rest of the poem. That is, an event can occur that changes ones perspective in an instant: a transformative event, or spiritual experience. Of course one does open oneself to sentiment when such occurs, something most often frowned upon in poetry. In this case however, I can find no other way to express what I need to express.
Thanks for the critique,
dale
as Hitler pardoned Roehm. "
No need of a pardon as Shakespeare said in MSND: "for when the players are all dead, there needs none to be blamed."
I tend to agree, or at least would in terms of critiquing this as purely a poem. In this instance the four lines ending on the penultimate is a concise synopsis of the rest of the poem. That is, an event can occur that changes ones perspective in an instant: a transformative event, or spiritual experience. Of course one does open oneself to sentiment when such occurs, something most often frowned upon in poetry. In this case however, I can find no other way to express what I need to express.
Thanks for the critique,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.