First year
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(10-31-2021, 01:55 PM)busker Wrote:  Nicely done.
“Lay” should be “lies” in the present tense
The last “the fawn” could be simply “him”

Also, it’s either “the fawn” or “fawn” - using both is confusing
Thanks. A little can do a lot.
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First year - by Kerbonzo_beenz - 10-31-2021, 09:18 AM
RE: First year - by busker - 10-31-2021, 01:55 PM
RE: First year - by Kerbonzo_beenz - 10-31-2021, 03:14 PM



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