10-31-2021, 01:55 PM
Nicely done.
“Lay” should be “lies” in the present tense
The last “the fawn” could be simply “him”
Also, it’s either “the fawn” or “fawn” - using both is confusing
“Lay” should be “lies” in the present tense
The last “the fawn” could be simply “him”
Also, it’s either “the fawn” or “fawn” - using both is confusing