10-14-2021, 07:12 AM
(10-14-2021, 05:01 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: Probably better to lay off the archaic language without first having at least a loose grasp of it. It's a pretense anyway and its contrast with the modern theme of the poem isn't really justified. The first few lines suggest an ear for meter but it soon dissolves. I would try it without the old english and more tightly focused on meter.I quite agree with your judgment on this and I have made the necessary edits.
Good Luck with it