07-11-2021, 10:48 PM
(07-11-2021, 01:47 PM)Poetry In Motion Wrote: Well I find that this poem is rather interesting but there are so many flaws in this piece that I cannot comprehend or even need to do any analyzing since most of it was done for me. I hope that my critique is helpful at least. I will echo what everyone else has said. Despite that the poem is beautifully rendered and has some nice imagery here and there. I like the ascension of getting from one pyramid to another. And the fact that you say you want the killing to begin which is what the whole vocal point of poem is about.Thanks for reading. I addressed the comments in the critiques as best I could (excepting those I simply don't agree with), so your ideas on the flaws would be welcome even if repetitive. As I said, I'm kind of tired of revising this one, but that doesn't mean I've given up on it.