07-10-2021, 09:12 AM
Thanks Mark and Knot,
This is (was) something I preserved from years (decades) ago. Although it's hard to let go of some of these lines, your suggestions are very helpful. But I will put them in a jar and save them for another poem.
It will be interesting to see what is left of the original by the time I find the place where it is going to end.
TqB
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I decided I wanted to have it both ways. I'm going to put this one aside for a while. Thanks for all your critiques.
This is (was) something I preserved from years (decades) ago. Although it's hard to let go of some of these lines, your suggestions are very helpful. But I will put them in a jar and save them for another poem.
It will be interesting to see what is left of the original by the time I find the place where it is going to end.
TqB
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I decided I wanted to have it both ways. I'm going to put this one aside for a while. Thanks for all your critiques.