Songs of Sacrifice

[Knot]

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Hi TqB,

I like to read what I don't understand, so I guess it carries over to what I write.

As far as reading goes, I'm rarely bothered if I understand a piece, or not - but it does make critiquing very tricky.

They initated the poem, but maybe they've done its job and need to go away.

Yes. Certainly worth ditching them (if only for a while). You can always restore them later. That's the nice thing about editing, it's never final.

My egypt heart is legion ... has something of a title about it (but not for a meso-American piece).

thinking about making this the first line

That was my first thought too, but then I ran into the limits of my 'understanding' so couldn't be sure it would work. If you think it will, go for it. Excellent way to begin.


Best, Knot

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