Mountain Sojourn edit 3

Mountain Sojourn edit 3

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06-18-2021, 09:28 PM

(06-18-2021, 09:00 PM)Knot Wrote: .
Hi TqB,
improved, but further to go, I think.

Some (somewhat) radical suggestions - because I think you've been playing it a little safe

Best, Knot

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I made some of your suggested changes, but I'm not ready to cut the first and last stanza entirely. Maybe tomorrow Undecided

. But thank you again for the careful read/edits.

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Mountain Sojourn edit 3 - by TranquillityBase - 06-15-2021, 10:49 PM

RE: Mountain Sojourn - by Knot - 06-16-2021, 12:41 AM

RE: Mountain Sojourn - by TranquillityBase - 06-17-2021, 02:47 PM

RE: Mountain Sojourn - by dukealien - 06-17-2021, 08:58 AM

RE: Mountain Sojourn - by Knot - 06-17-2021, 09:00 PM

RE: Mountain Sojourn edit - by Mark A Becker - 06-18-2021, 01:10 AM

RE: Mountain Sojourn edit - by Knot - 06-18-2021, 02:30 AM

RE: Mountain Sojourn edit - by TranquillityBase - 06-18-2021, 10:17 AM

RE: Mountain Sojourn edit 3 - by Knot - 06-18-2021, 09:00 PM

RE: Mountain Sojourn edit 3 - by TranquillityBase - 06-18-2021, 09:28 PM

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