Gnashing of Teeth

[tmanzano]

It's selfish to taste your morning 
all at once knowing you had passed
but that was yesterday when you touched all those babies (Why babies? What is the significance of them?)
when they breathed you in deep and smelled San Diego (Very nice image, well done here!)

I stared too long at you, into your echoes
your masturbating old age into oxygen bottles
stroking out to door handles you twisted to leave here (Unusual image, I don't quite get it.)

When you cinder
I will give you back to Mexico
with all my pulverized bone wrapped in plastic 
sealed tight enough for you to gnash your teeth on (Great ending! Nice one!)



( I have not been here in quite some time. Years in fact. Yet, still I write in code... Have I learned nothing? I find it difficult to give too much away. Please be easy on me, I want to work on this one but I am just not sure what to add or remove. If it helps, my father was a child molester. I am not sure that easily is seen here. Thank you all for being here)

I think I get the ending, it was also nice by the way but I feel that the rest of the strophes are rather confusing for me. Anyway, thanks for sharing!

Thank you for your comments. Gets me closer to what needs to be corrected. I need to re-work and these comments get me closer.