04-04-2021, 03:06 AM
I really can't tell you anything to change about this poem. I can tell you how it left me feeling, which is I'd really like to know Helen.
As to the good suggestions that followed my brief one, I guess I'd wonder if Helen is speaking or thinking those lines. I took it has her speaking. Possibly incredible that anyone would talk that way in ordinary conversation, but novels hope so every day, so why not? So I took mocking and shrieking as more joking than serious.
As to the good suggestions that followed my brief one, I guess I'd wonder if Helen is speaking or thinking those lines. I took it has her speaking. Possibly incredible that anyone would talk that way in ordinary conversation, but novels hope so every day, so why not? So I took mocking and shrieking as more joking than serious.