03-11-2021, 05:05 AM
Hi Alexandorande, this is an edit after thinking more about my reactions
"petricor" is a cool word, but too obscure to me; but I think it would make a better title
the best lines of the poem follow that word, so until i looked it up, i couldn't appreciate them.
to me they seemed the core of the poem.
I'm confused as to the change in tense at end of 2nd stanza. I get it now.
But I don't think you need that last line.
"petricor" is a cool word, but too obscure to me; but I think it would make a better title
the best lines of the poem follow that word, so until i looked it up, i couldn't appreciate them.
to me they seemed the core of the poem.
I'm confused as to the change in tense at end of 2nd stanza. I get it now.
But I don't think you need that last line.