09-12-2020, 01:49 AM
Thank you so much for your comments! I have edited the poem since I received the first bit of feedback so now it looks like this. Maybe I will rearrange the lines because you seemed to like the change in rhyme scheme in the middle.
You smile,
it’s a mystery
what’s going on behind the scenes.
Gazing at you in full screen,
I know you’re not looking at me.
But when you stare right at the light,
you’re piercing deep into my eyes.
The many distant words I hear
are going out the other ear.
It’s hard to focus on the task
when you are part of my Zoom class.
You smile,
it’s a mystery
what’s going on behind the scenes.
Gazing at you in full screen,
I know you’re not looking at me.
But when you stare right at the light,
you’re piercing deep into my eyes.
The many distant words I hear
are going out the other ear.
It’s hard to focus on the task
when you are part of my Zoom class.