08-14-2020, 09:09 AM
So mankind suckles from the marrow of mankind is the idea you're trying to convey? I think you might want to give those last few lines a bit more consideration. If that's what you're trying to say, then yes that's very confusing to me at least. If it's a line about our self-destructiveness then I think there could be better, less confusing ways to put it while sticking to that clever word scheme you have going on.

