in the event of moon disaster

[Joyful Noise]

'sinkholes as deep as the diver' is actually quite good, and makes sense. at least, to me.
don't be in a hurry to revise. let it marinade. the revised version betrays haste (and is significantly worse than the original)

I appreciate your straightforwardness, busker. My revisions are meant more to be a fitting room excursion and less a final sale. Really I just wanted to “try on” a new metaphor (particularly in the second stanza). Not necessarily wanting to stick with it.