Into The Deep

[Valerie Please]

Death is my carriage but I am it's horse[/align]

I love this line. Here is everything I love about this line. 

It is relentlessly original, I’ve not heard this idea expressed before in this way. At the same time it has a classic sound to it, especially the use of “carriage” or “horse” makes it sound like it could have been a line from an Emily Dickinson poem, except she’s not quite this good. I even googled it because it sounds so authentic, like something new that shouldn’t be new.

Furthermore, I love the way it hits me in the face. It’s an unexpected arrangement both in syntax and concept. It’s surprising and confusing. It makes me do a double take. I want to read it again and consider the implications of the phrase. In this one line you have made an observation about the relationship between people and death that is very tangible.

This line is what a poem should do.