The Thing About Night
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savannah,

Welcome to the site.

Todd makes excellent points and I concur with them all.

" I never looked at a rearview mirror (rear-view)
without a speckle."

Question, I'm not really making sense of this line. Do you mean "speckle" as: 'a small speck, spot, or mark, as on skin.' Is there an alternate meaning?

Another problematic line for me is:

"but they shine brighter
on those stitches, undone."

What is undone and if it is 'stitches,' the meaning eludes me.

Anyway a solid effort.

best,

dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?

The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
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The Thing About Night - by savannah - 03-25-2020, 03:18 AM
RE: The Thing About Night - by Todd - 03-25-2020, 04:21 AM
RE: The Thing About Night - by Erthona - 03-26-2020, 11:00 AM
RE: The Thing About Night - by savannah - 03-26-2020, 06:29 PM



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