Rose

[Gaygoddess]

I feel like this poem has plenty of room for growth! I would definitely keep “a rose”  but tell us that it represents passion and love in another way, as a rose is already symbolic for those things. Definitely avoid cliches! If you decide to change ruby red and aren’t feeling relentless red maybe try burning red? I like stepping away from alliteration. Overall, I felt that the poem was too literal and you could increase its impact with more imagery and less words.