01-30-2019, 12:25 PM
Hey billy,
Thanks for the feedback. I am thinking of changing the title in the next edit. I started out with an idea in the original, and the more I revise, the further I get from that idea, and I think the title reflects that. This was actually the third part to a trilogy of poems, but I never said that before now because it needs to be able to stand on its own. I'm thinking part of my problem is that I tie it back to those two previous poems, but that creates blanks within this poem that hurt it. Hope that makes sense, feel like I'm rambling a bit.
Thanks again,
Richard
Thanks for the feedback. I am thinking of changing the title in the next edit. I started out with an idea in the original, and the more I revise, the further I get from that idea, and I think the title reflects that. This was actually the third part to a trilogy of poems, but I never said that before now because it needs to be able to stand on its own. I'm thinking part of my problem is that I tie it back to those two previous poems, but that creates blanks within this poem that hurt it. Hope that makes sense, feel like I'm rambling a bit.
Thanks again,
Richard
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