First Edit: Lonesome as a Hotel Lobby Christmas Tree

[alonso ramoran]

Hi Richard,
Been meaning to visit my thoughts on this poem for a while. Those thoughts are below. All in all it's a good read.

Lonesome as a Hotel Lobby Christmas Tree

Easily overlooked
among late arrivals, "and" instead of comma?
early checkouts.
Lights obey a timer, I don't think a comma is needed here. I get the purpose that the first three lines serve, but I feel like the poem should open here. While the first three lines are not bad, they're just absent of imagery. Maybe you could work something with lights obeying a timer and the tree being easily overlooked bc of late check-ins and early check-outs?
while an aged angel
is crooked, burned out,
but its halo freshly painted.

I'd like to think
you'd notice too:
stop, smile,
whisper some words
just loud enough
so you feel a little less alone.

I feel like the "you" is another person who is admiring the sad state of the tree. To speculate a little further, I also feel like the angel is this person. If so, then the poem does a good job of making the reader initially believe one thing instead of what it truly is about after a couple rereads.

Regards,
Alex