12-25-2018, 04:32 PM
Rowens, interesting poem but far too long for the twitter attention span.
The stanzas i have the most issue with are:
the first and second stanza just seem redundant. Also, stanza six. Why? It seems to be that you have written about three types of people, those who find people who agree with them, you know, safe spacers, those who are argue about everything, and those who are sure about everything... then stanza six is “peole fit into these three categories and creativity/consciousness above existence is dulled” i think you cover it in the rest of the poem.
The poem reads as warning chimes, the last stanza a sirens wail. There is a lot to like.
The stanzas i have the most issue with are:
the first and second stanza just seem redundant. Also, stanza six. Why? It seems to be that you have written about three types of people, those who find people who agree with them, you know, safe spacers, those who are argue about everything, and those who are sure about everything... then stanza six is “peole fit into these three categories and creativity/consciousness above existence is dulled” i think you cover it in the rest of the poem.
The poem reads as warning chimes, the last stanza a sirens wail. There is a lot to like.