Bailey [v1.003]

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Thanks for the feedback, finals have me bolted to my studies

I'm picturing a wounded retriever in a field, maybe shot, maybe wolved or bear'd, but with an angry tone towards some man or men that brought this about.  I've met a lot of dogs named Bailey.  

That's a spot on comparison actually; a task oriented, loyal, companion, broken and lost. Disharmony on some level, unforeseen to the dog, things just happen and it sucks ass!

I liked your comparison of the souls being scorched by the sun very intense Also men's ashes shadowing flied is very strong a vivid image Referring to sorrows as cloud very imaginative
The reference to bitch to me spoils what is other wise a nice poem

Noted! I thought so too.