The Fucking Band-Aid

[CrystalScully]

Edited Version:

Breathe slowly
Breathe deep
Heal slowly
Heal deep This opening sets a rhythm that evokes steady breathing.  I think that works well here.

glued Skin - bound, is the capitalization here intentional?  It makes "Skin" into the subject of the poem, almost a character.
each piece leaves
a mark

Passion to heal
addicted to mend not the right phrasing, adjust this a little
aroused by repair I would break the stanza here
licking the gash
some past Juliets left

Leftover warmth.

No dirt. the itching
beneath, bearing it,
fondling the wound. The mildly sexual imagery works very well here

Techniques to re-build I don't like the word "technique" here, it's too technical
under water and heat
against dust and rust
Distinct alteration
slow transmutation
from a sterile device
to a carnal drag.

Eroded and sloppy starts to detach
no more affection,
lust or infections
Holding your breath
pull it apart
unfold the fresh scar

Leftover love. Good closing


(Original)
Breathe slowly
Breathe deep
Heal slowly
Heal deep
 
Skin-bound
gluing each piece
healing it good
leaves a mark
 
Passion to heal
addicted to mend, aroused by repair
licking the gash
some past Juliets left
Leftover warmth.
 
Stick to it
such a good job
The itching beneath,
no scratching allowed.
Stuck to it, bearing it
worn down, well done.
no dirt, no mud
fondling the wound.
 
Techniques to re-build
under water and heat, against dust and rust
Distinct alteration
slow transmutation
from a sterile device
to a carnal drag.
 
Eroded and sloppy starts to detach
no more affection,
lust or infections
Holding your breath
pull it apart
unfold the fresh scar.
 
Leftovers of love